A quick clarification: If you enjoyed this anime good for you. Im not here to make you hate it or anything like that. This is a review not an opinion Yes I want to clarify that because for some reason people often confuse them with each other. Also Im a human if you didnt know so I couldve made some mistakes here and there. If I did please feel free to correct me. Oh and Im gonna criticize the anime not the original story. Mostly because when they were making the animation they couldve made some changes to make it better Also I havent read the source material and I dont care to do so since in this case it doesnt matter if its a good adaptation or whatever. Thats it enjoy I guess. Hello and welcome to Egos storytelling corner. My name is Dr. Ego as you probably remember and today we are gonna be talking about disappointing your audience. Wait you said you were gonna do a revie YES I WILL JUST LET ME GET TO IT FIRST. So what was I saying? Ah yes storytelling is a very complicated subject. When creating a story it is important to always think several times about what you have written and come back to it once in a while to see if it still works after youve written the rest of the story. I honestly have no idea what happened while creating Finest assassin but the difference between the first episode and the rest is shocking. Its like a skilled person wrote the first episode and a beginner wrote the rest. Even though the themes in this anime are really good it physically hurts me that they have been wasted in such a way So lets fix that. Lets see what couldve been done to salvage this story so I can finally sleep at night. 1. The title The Worlds Finest Assassin Gets Reincarnated in Another World as an Aristocrat What is that? No Im asking seriously. Anyone? No? ITS A MISTAKE THATS WHAT IT IS. By now youre probably thinking: Is he off his meds or somethin?. Nope Im good. Thank you very much. First of all this title is way too long. I literally could fall asleep in the middle or reading all this crap. There is so much information in the title alone that you actually could say it contains spoilers for the story I mean cmon how absurd does that sound? For example: When you have Assassination Classroom you have Assassination Classroom and not A Classroom of Troublesome Children is Forced to Assassinate Their Alien Teacher Otherwise Hes Gonna Blow Up the Earth. So how do we fix that? First of all lets remove all the useless information. We dont need to know that hes the finest assassin because we can see that by his actions in the first episode. We also dont need to know that hes gonna be an aristocrat since that literally doesnt change anything. So what do we have left? Assassin Gets Reincarnated Into Another World. The current problem is that it feels very generic like anything Like ever... What Im saying is that its forgettable. So what you wanna do is to make it catchy and memorable like: Assassins Pride. No wait that one has been used already So maybe: Learn from your past. No the main character doesnt do that OH Ive got it Assassins Sight. Alright I know that sounds as cheesy as humanly possible but think about it. Besides having his special vision which is important to the story we also watch most of the story from his perspective And hes an assassin so we are gonna work with it. 2. The Opening https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954066642843877496/Pozy.png Alright point number two What was it Ah yes the opening. Its actually pretty good at least until you realize it isnt. What do you mean by that? In my opinion it looked pretty cool. Good question Jeremy. You see even though the music and animation are good the problem is that its meaningless. Im not gonna talk about the typical things like: Characters striking a pose because I dont have time for this Why are you guys looking at me like that? Because we know you are gonna talk about it. OKAY FINE. Im not gonna talk about everything but I have to talk about something right? Now lets talk about these poses or whatever I should call it. Things like that can be either good or bad it depends on how you use it. This opening somehow managed to do it both ways. This striking a pose at the beginning is okay because the most important thing that decides if its okay or not is Is what? I wanted you guys to finish the sentence. Oh umm Time? Exactly This episode lasts about two seconds or half a second for each character which is pretty good. One of the many mistakes that make it into the openings is that this pose thing takes way too long like seven to eight seconds. I can eat a full freaking cup of pudding in that time Now you are probably thinking: Then whats the bad thing about it?. Well the problem is that they do it AGAIN at the ending of the op. But it is supposed to give hints about the characters past. Very good observation Stacy. That is actually a very clever section but why didnt they just put this at the beginning then? It would made some space for something that could have some meaning behind it. Also overusing these poses may be a sign of laziness or lack of creativity for some people and thats something you definitely dont want. Oh I almost forgot to mention one thing. Almost half of the opening is focused on what happened in the first episode and is mostly irrelevant to what the rest of the show is. This is in my opinion a very big sign which says that even the animators didnt know what to put into the opening and I honestly dont blame them. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954066691636211742/Maski.png Okay so lets talk about this frame. Its just a typical case of It looks cool lets do that. The theme of people putting masks on is so unexplored its not even funny. Yeah we have this nice aristocrat guy or whatever hes called who permits selling drugs behind the scenes so that he and his wife wouldnt be poor anymore but its just a very bad example of trying to make the audience feel sorry for the bad guy. Now you are probably wondering why I used quotes for the word bad. Well thats because we dont even see him do anything bad We are just told that this guy is getting paid to allow these dangerous drugs to pass through the town and thats it. We never saw him pay someone to distribute the drugs or that the kind guy face is just for the public or anything like that. I have to give them credit for showing the effects that these drugs have on people but thats about where the positives end. Also why the hell would our protagonist need a fake identity to kill this guy when killing him is just as easy as shooting him while hes standing on the freaking balcony? That was a question to you guys. Anyone? Okay so maybe Stacy. I dont know Okay then maybe Mia. Its so we can feel sorry for the aristocrat Thats right Thats also known as plot conven Wait thats not plot convenience pardon me. I wanted to say THATS BAD WRITING Okay to fix these problems you actually dont need that much effort. The ingredients are here you just have to make the soup as some people say. But nobody says th SHUSH First of all to make the audience feel sorry for this guy you have to show that their life was actually bad. Since they never showed us them being poor we as an audience are not able to know how bad their life was. For all we know this poverty could just be the case of Honey thats terrible I dont have the money to buy this new expensive useless cosmetic that everyone has. Thats why for example you could start the episode with the aristocrats wife waking up form a nightmare where she dreamt that they were poor again. Soon after the husband would come into the bedroom to comfort her and you could start the opening. Then the rest of the episode could play out as it did in the original to the point of meeting the couple. After that you could make the main protagonists stay at the couples mansion for the night so that we could witness how the aristocrat is getting paid for the distribution. They could show us that by allowing the main characters to spy on him during the night. Then through some dialogue you could reveal that he hates common folk and thats why hes distributing this drug without hesitation. After that you could make the protagonist eavesdrop while preparing for assassination so that he could hear the reason why the aristocrat despises people from this town so much. Here is an example: Because of the towns residents they lost all of their fortune and his wife almost died because she got sick and they didnt have enough money to buy medicine. Then the drug deal came up and he accepted it to save his wife and have revenge on the people who took away everything from them. This way we could see that even though his actions hurt people he has a reason for his deeds. Thats how you make a two dimensional side character and not a piece of stale bread. Also you could make the protagonist kill the aristocrat by adding a modified version of the drug that hes selling and this way you could say that he made his own fate. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954066714092503160/Moneta.png Oh god I have been talking for so long and we are still on the first two seconds fantastic. Since for the next couple seconds there is nothing interesting to talk about lets move to this shot. Its actually very clever since it suggests that The Goddess has been observing the protagonist before he died but there is something wrong with it. Now can you guess what in this shot pisses me off? Why would it piss you off? You just said that its clever Jeremy please dont raise your voice if its unnecessary. Im sorry Okay so maybe Brian. Im guessing tthat it would be the ccoin. Great job Ten points for Gryffindor Also I know youve had a hard time but remember you have no reason to be stressed here just let your imagination run wild and share your thoughts because thats what we are about here. Okay Now the coin is crucial here. Everything in the frame is black and white. The coin is the only thing that has color. In art such thing is called monochrome and its supposed to draw viewers attention to the most important thing in the picture. So do you think the coin has any importance? Of course it doesnt They just thought its a cool shot so they did it. It pisses me off because its such a waste of potential. With this coin you really could build up the main character for example: Since hes been a tool for the mysterious organization all his life this could mean that he cant decide for himself because all the decisions were made for him. To show that you could set up a scene in which there are two good methods of killing a target but since he can only choose one he flips a coin to make it decide for him. The same way Kanao from Demon Slayer does. Then you could put him in a dilemma where he has to decide for himself for the first time. Here is a very simple example: The love of his life is in danger and in order to save her he has to fight with an enemy stronger than him just like in the twelfth episode. Since its a battle he cant win he tosses a coin to decide whether to save himself or her. The result is that hes supposed to run away and save himself but he ultimately decides to stay and protect whats important to him making his first decision and changing his life around. Thats what we call an arc ladies and gentleman. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954066824457232424/Pacz.png Here is a question that nobody has an answer for: Why the hell is she crying? Like seriously why? There is nothing in the anime that would explain what she is sad about. Im not joking. It seems as if the animators responsible for the opening didnt even know what the story was about Either that or it was just another case of: Hey that looks cool. Lets do that. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954066845516832819/Wsciek.png Alright we dont have much time and we still are on the opening so lets wrap up this section with this shot. This is only one of two instances where the main character shows any emotion and it implies that he is going to be either enraged or in a tough fight where he has to do his best. The problem is that he doesnt. Throughout the show everything is just easy for him so easy in fact that he puts in less effort than me when I wake up every freakin morning Why is that? Because plot convenience but lets talk about that later. 3. Characters Plot Okay we are gonna have to talk about these segments at the same time because half of the shows runtime is their origin story so its gonna be easier to explain everything while talking about them both at the same time. I wont go into details about the protagonists parents or side characters because they are flatter than the pieces of paper in my printer. Now lets start with Dia. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067073779265536/Dia.png Dia is our protagonists love interest at least according to the script. I mean seriously Tarte has the most screen time out of all three and despite this Dia is the one we should be more invested in? I know the protagonist met her first but come on shes gone throughout almost the entire runtime after shes introduced Yes we have some parts here and there where she meets with the protagonist and we also have the eleventh episode where they spend time together but thats not enough. For example when you watch: Banished from the Heros Party I Decided to Live a Quiet Life in the Countryside another great title by the way you can see the chemistry between Rit and Red no problem because they gave us time to see their relationship. We see them live together fight together and take care of one another. Here we dont see any of this. The only thing we see is the generic Oh they are smiling while insert activity here that must mean they love each other also known as LAZY WRITING. Oh I also forgot to mention Dia is the protagonists relative. I dont know if you heard but there is this anime called Sword Art Online and if it has taught us anything it is this: DO NOT PUT INCEST INTO YOUR STORY FOR GOODNESS SAKE. WHAT IS THIS? SWEET HOME FCKING ALABAMA? GOOD LUCK AT RE Lets move on. The only way she can be fixed as a character is to not make her the love interest and just leave her as a normal family member. With that her relationship with the protagonist wouldnt change much and he still would have a reason to save her. Now lets move to the next one. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067103021940816/Tarte.png Oh god here we go. Wait what is wrong with Tarte? I mean shes got a quick origin story and a reason to stick around our protagonist. So why are you bringing her up? Stacy have youve read what I asked you to on our previous lesson? Of course I did No you didnt. Because if you did you wouldnt be asking that question. Everyone else knows why Im talking about her? Brian? Mia? Jeremy? See? Everyone else knows. Okay fine I didnt do it. Listen you are not in the best condition right now and I get it but if you dont want to be here the doors are always open. If you do want to be here please at least read what I give you. Printing isnt cheap you know? Right right. Okay so maybe Mia tell us what is wrong with her. Its obvious shes as lazy as humanly possible Exac Wait what? Woman do you have some personal vendetta against me or something? Girls what I said earlier? No fighting in the classroom Are we clear? But she I SAID ARE WE CLEAR? Yes Mia? Fine Now where were we Jeremy since they didnt give us an explanation maybe you will tell us? Her origin story doesnt impact the plot or her character FINALLY Yes it doesnt have any impact on both her and the story. When we meet her we are fed with information about How hard the life in the neighboring kingdom is or How her family had to get rid of her because there were too many mouths to feed. There are several problems though. First of all she tells us all about it but we never get to see it. We never see her family or this neighboring kingdom. Literally one of the basic rules while making a movie or an animation is Show dont tell. I mean for goodness sake they have spent an entire episode on Mahas origin story to which I will get into in a moment but for Tarte we only get what? Not even a half of that And the only thing that we get is just the aftermath of what shouldve sculpted her into a character. Yes I said shouldve because she isnt a character she is a shell as empty as my bank account. After cutting out her origin story you could just replaced her with any generic harem anime girl and people wouldnt see the difference. I mean when your characters only defining tropes are that she uses spears has twintails and is praising the main character about every word he says its not hard to forget about her is it? The funniest thing is that its really easy to fix that. The biggest problem is that her origin didnt impact the way she acts around other people. I mean lets be honest when your own family has left you to die of starvation you would not only treasure every meal but had a lack of trust towards other people. So what does she do? The exact freaking opposite She doesnt store food for later or anything like that and she believes a random boy that he isnt gonna leave her like her family did just because he saved her from some wolves? I know she trusts him because he used manipulation or whatever but if they would show us that hes trying to earn her trust throughout the episodes that would imply that hes struggling with something and tries hes best to achieve it. If they would give us scenes where for example Tarte is storing some food for later that would show us that shes afraid of going back to how things were which would build her as a character. Not only that they could add a scene after where she for example gives some of this food to homeless kids or something like that which would build her as caring and compassionate because she has been in the same place as them. We also could have scenes where she doubts that the protagonist would come back for her or something like that and after some time whenever hes leaving she would have fewer doubts about him meaning their relationship is getting better. To put more salt into the wound the climax for her character arc is I never thought I would have to say this not running far enough. What in the flying FCK does that have to do with her past? BEING USEFUL MY ASS SHE ISNT FOREST GUMP FOR GOODNESS SAKE If this would be a sport themed anime it couldve worked but that is NOT a sport anime I know her family threw her out because she was useless to them but since we never see her struggling at basic tasks or being too weak to do something this just feels disconnected and pointless. Now lets move on before Ill have to go to therapy again. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067488965001226/Smutek.png But before I talk about Maha I want to say a few words about this scene. This scene gives me the biggest ass ache Ive had in years. It features such good cinematography that I seriously cant believe it was done by the same people that made the rest of this crap. There are no words said every part of this scene is left to be interpreted by the viewers which makes the realization even more impactful. In this case they used a simple writing trick which bases on seeing a character struggle to achieve their goal and when they are really close to achieving it it gets brutally ripped from their grasp and they land in a worse place than where they started. Here its represented by the girls working hard to collect money so they wont have to live on the street anymore. When you see that they are happy and almost have enough money to achieve their goal the money gets taken from them and they are put into the orphanage. Here they actually go a step further by making the viewers think that their dream came true because now they live together in a house and have something to eat but then You know the rest. Rape child prostitution and self harm are very hard and painful topics so they need to be handled with care and used only when its absolutely necessary for the story. Unfortunately they didnt do that here. Its just yes Mia? Its just another case of: It looks good lets do that? Exactly that. It has no relevance to the story. We barely see those girls after this episode just maybe for a couple of seconds and thats it. They dont even do anything significant. They are just put in charge of a beauty supply shop and thats it. But if they werent there then Maha wouldnt have a reason to come with him What do you mean by that? I mean she came with him in exchange for their safety right? Jeremy have you fallen asleep or something while watching this? Because thats not what happened. Just a little Then please do something about your sleeping schedule. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067514323783750/Maha.png Anyway what was I saying? Ah yes Maha is a terrible character. We can forget about all that reclaiming her fathers company stuff since its just a lazy excuse so she can have some kind of past. Because as I said earlier it doesnt bear any meaning to her character or the plot. You could argue that its because this way she can be put in charge of finances etc. But this could be replaced by her just being good at math or even better they could replace that with her studying hard to learn math so she could prove herself useful to the protagonist Yes Brian? But it ccould be set up for a ssequel. Oh my dear foolish student. Saying it may be a setup for next season doesnt change anything because who knows if there is even gonna be a next season. If there would be then not including this information in the first season would be even better. Mostly because they would have to waste time for repeating this information to the people that forgot about it which would also bore the audience that has remembered it since nobody likes to waste their time on listening to something they already know. Remember how I said that they showed us the scene with the orphanage because for some reason child prostitution and self harm seem like a cool topic to them? It literally wouldnt change anything if the protagonist found them on the fcking street just like at the start of the episode which in the end makes it a waste of time. You could sum this episode up just like any other episode of harem anime: Boy find girl. Girl like boy. Girl go with boy. If you are writing a script or a story and your characters can be summed up by these three sentences then you have some serious rewrites ahead of you. It would actually be better for Maha to not be in this scene since when the protagonist came to pick her up the audience can find her uncompassionate and selfish. I mean she has spent a couple years with those girls saw what happened to them and when a handsome young boy came to take her with him she doesnt resist or say anything like: I wont go anywhere without my friends. She would just leave them to save herself and live happily while the other girls would suffer for the rest of their lives. Okay now lets fix that walking pile of garbage. It took me some time to think how to fix this mess without changing too much of the setups that have been given to me but I like a good challenge. The only change I made was to the age of Maha and the other girls. I made Maha the oldest and the rest of the girls the same age as she was in the original. Here is how it would play out: If she was the oldest and the other girls were too young for this job it would mean that Maha would be the one to satisfy the customers. After a few of these jobs she would be the one to injure her face while the other girls would try to stop her. The boss or whoever this guy was would say that since she was no longer pretty one of the other girls would have to take her place. After realizing what she had done she would insist that she would put on makeup and continue her job. Then the protagonist would show up and choose Maha to go with him since he only cares about her mana and not how she looks. Instead of accepting his offer she would give him an ultimatum. Either he would take them all or she wont come with him. He would agree and say to the boss that since they are a part of his family now he will regret if he hurts them. After the protagonist left the boss would try to lay his hands on one of the girls and Maha would attack him to protect her. She is then overpowered and is kicked on the floor almost dying. Then the protagonist comes to her rescue and kills those who hurt her because they broke their promise. This setup would not only build Maha as compassionate it would also show that she cares about the other girls more than herself and that she will do anything in her power to protect them. It would also make her more cautious and violent towards men other than the protagonist since many of them have hurt her. It would be something that would make her stand out and make her less forgettable. With this we would now have a memorable character with defying characteristics and not just some stereotypical anime girl that can be replaced with ease. How long did it took you to think of this? About two hours or maybe an hour and a half but something around these lines. It seriously isnt that hard you just have to remember one thing that everything needs to have a meaning. Its a simple way of thinking but it helps a lot. And yes do try this at home. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067539913220096/Protagonista.png And so here we are. The tip of the iceberg ladies and gentleman this guy. Jesus do I have problems with this man. Okay alright Lets start from the top. Just when he arrives to this foreign land he literally contradicts himself. He says Im not gonna be a tool anymore. Im gonna live for myself. You probably can guess what Im gonna say so maybe Stacy please finish my sentence. He does the exact opposite Thats right. The exact freaking opposite. In his previous life he was a tool for a mysterious organization. We dont see the people behind the organization but by the way they killed the protagonist we can see that they had control over practically everything. After being reincarnated he works for his dad to continue the family of assassins. This statement already contradicts his words about living for himself. We never see him oppose his dads suggestions or anything like that he just does everything his dad says. That is the base of the freaking story and they couldnt even get that right You could argue that this is because his dad is an experienced assassin and he wants to learn things from him. Unfortunately thats even worse Hes supposed be the finest assassin for goodness sake Okay let me get this straight. First of all the protagonist in his previous life looked way older than his new dad which would imply that he is a lot more experienced. Besides do you really think a modern assassin who knows techniques perfected over thousands of years needs to learn from someone living in the Middle Ages? Exactly thats why these scenes of him training his body the way his father tells him dont make any sense. Mostly because lets face it modern training techniques are probably way better than the ones from the Middle Ages. It would have been much better if they just showed us how he tells his father that there are some flaws in his techniques. They could have even shown us how the protagonist trains in his own way and that it makes him better than his father. That would be so simple and yet we didnt get that. By the way did you realize that this guy even though hes supposed to be the best assassin is as dense as a brick? I didnt Me neither. I actually think hes plans and stuff are okay. I personally found them average but I didnt find anything wrong with them I understand it was actually hard to spot at first sight so Im gonna tell you what I mean. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067558171050004/Idiotyzm1.png What do you think is wrong with this picture? Okay fine Ill answer it myself since I can see that you guys are bit tired. I dont blame you. Its getting late and the only thing you were doing for the past hour is listening to a guy wearing a weird mask whos talking gibberish about Japanese cartoons. So Ill try to make it quick. How can this man be the best assassin when he only changes his appearance and not Tartes when they are undercover? Since these are somewhat medieval ages it would be weird to make the same girl work for two different people as a secretary wouldnt it? Especially when he and his fake identity live in different kingdoms Does he really think that people in the middle ages were so stupid that some monarch or whoever wouldnt find it suspicious? Still not convinced? Well here is another example. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067576726634566/Idiotyzm2.png This cu I mean very very bad man was abusing children and forcing them into prostitution just so he can earn some money from aristocrats. And after all hes done our big brain protagonist just let him go so he can be judged by the law. HOW DENSE IS THIS GUY? If he was doing shady business for the aristocrats its pretty freaking obvious that they are gonna help him get out of jail just because of the services he provides. By not killing him on the spot not only is or protagonist letting this guy off the hook but also hes disappointing his audience. The sixth episode made the audience hate this guy to the guts and by not killing him you are not doing what your audience wants therefore disappointing them. Also I just want to add one tiny little detail. Our protagonist is an assassin yet we only see him kill what? Two? Three people at most? Any other isekai harem anime protagonist has a bigger kill count than a guy who is a freaking assassin Doesnt that sound absurd? Let me answer for you : Yes yes it does. One of the key factors that made this anime a disappointment is that in the first episode it introduced itself as a high in action assassin story. But what we actually got is: Aristocrat Simulator. For goodness sake we more often see the protagonist sitting on chairs and couches than killing or preparing to kill other people. The only time we dont see him sitting still is when hes riding in the carriage which as you can probably guess is not good. Now since we are at the point of disappointing your audience lets talk about the antagonist Oh wait THERE ISNT ONE. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067618850046042/Nieantagonista.png Now you are probably thinking: What about this guy? This guy is so empty you cant call him an antagonist. Actually you cant even call him a character. He doesnt have any personality or special traits besides buff guy with big muscles. This antagonist doesnt even appear before the final episode. I know that Maha showed us his picture a couple episodes earlier while saying: This guy is strong but do you really think that this is enough for the audience? Hes more replaceable than the batteries in my freaking remote Now to fix that first of all you should make him seem like a real threat. For example you could show that there were other assassins that tried to get rid of him but he defeated them without effort with his flying weapon. This way you would introduce him as a threat to any assassin that tries to fight with him. But even then he as an antagonist still wouldnt be as hated as the guys from Mahas backstory. To make sure that the viewers not only despise the man but also to show that he is a threat to the characters you can make the beauty supply shop in which the girls worked be located in one of the cities that he attacked. He could destroy the store and intentionally hurt one of the characters. Lets say Maha for example. Now this guy is a personal antagonist not only to the characters but to the audience as well because he hurt one of the characters that the audience has come to care about. You could also make it that the locations which our protagonist previously visited could be slowly destroyed by this guy and his army one by one. By that not only you could see what hes capable of but this would also set a visible timer for the audience which would show that he is getting closer to our main characters. Finally you could make him and the protagonist fight somewhere else than on an empty field because otherwise its going to be as interesting as watching grass grow. You could make them fight in some sort of big structure a cathedra for example. By that time the antagonist would be remembered as a brute force and our protagonist as a stealth killer. Since the antagonist would easily overpower the protagonist he would have to hide around the building while avoiding the flying weapon which would be destroying the place when its searching for him. This way our protagonist would be able to place bombs that he couldve crafted earlier around the building and then blow it up with the antagonist inside killing him in the process. In my opinion this would be a much more interesting fight than watching two guys standing in a field talk pointlessly to each other until the antagonist gets hit by an orbital cannon. Ah yes that reminded me something. WHY THE HELL SOMEONE WHO HAS BEEN INTRODUCED AS A STEALTH KILLER USES A FCKING NUKE? That is the worst thing that they couldve done This is one of the many ways that this anime disappointed its audience. When you think assassin you think stealth and not nuclear warheads. Here is one great advice which Ive learned while learning about storytelling: When you meet a person who is blue and then get more shades of blue every time you meet them youre not gonna forget that this person is blue. But if you meet a person who is green and then red and then orange and then yellow you lose the sense who that person is. I also want to point out that this anime is basically insulting its audience by mocking the most important rule which is called Chekovs gun. Basically the idea goes like this: For every setup there need to be a payoff. Here we dont even get one setup that follows this rule. The closest thing that we got was the scene with the magical mana balls or whatever. This was supposed to be a setup for the orbital cannon which the protagonist uses in the final episode. We also get a glimpse of the deserted island which Maha magically found just so our character can practice shooting the cannon behind the scenes. The problem is that the audience cant see any connection between the balls the island and the cannon. If you want to do this correctly you must first establish that one thing is related to the other. Instead of wasting our time on useless exposition while doing nothing they could give us that exposition while the protagonist would for example experiment with these balls by putting them in a container and blowing them up. After that you could show that since he isnt from this world he destroyed his room while experimenting with magic. That would at least show us some of his characteristics since throughout the entire runtime we dont see anything interesting about him. Oh while Im talking about that I want to mention a certain scene. https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/863527652308418593/954067638370304070/Niekomfort.png I hate this scene so much. Lets be honest seeing 14 year old girls offering special services to our protagonist is well FCKING GROSS. I know the age of consent in Japan is 14 or whatever it is nowadays but for goodness sake is it so hard to make the characters a bit older? WHAT IS WRONG WITH YOU PEOPLE? But as much as I despise this scene I have to give them credit for one thing. You were probably wondering what was the second instance in which the protagonist shows any emotion as I have mentioned when discussing the opening. Its this one unfortunately. Here we can see that the character is embarrassed after well Wetting the bed because he had a nice dream Lets leave it at that. Seeing him behave in a way that we have never seen before would imply that he had never dealt with a situation like this before and did not know how to react. It could also imply that he is not used to living in a young body. Unfortunately in the end it doesnt matter since its just another Well you get it. Throughout my chitchat you couldve noticed that I have always called the main character: The protagonist. Here is your answer why: Because he doesnt deserve to be called by his name since he is an empty shell and not a character. Also one of the reasons was the characters name: Lugh. You couldve given your character any name you want but why give him the name of the mythical king of Ireland? Creating a clever name for a character is difficult I get it but at least try to pick one that is easy to pronounce. When I hear the voice actors struggle to say their characters name it just makes me feel sorry for them. I know that giving characters names from your country of origin isnt always the best idea mostly because then characters names could repeat with the names of some popular characters making it easy to confuse one with the other. But thats why clever names make the characters more memorable. Everybody remembers the name Zero Two not only because there is only one character that has that name but because it only works for her since its relevant to her story and the animes plot. Also fun fact: They dont even pronounce the protagonists name correctly In the anime they pronounce it the same as its written: Lugh but in both Ireland and the United States it is pronounced Loo. Just imagine how much easier the voice actors job would be if someone just did a little bit of research. 4. Summary I think Im getting a sore throat from all this talking so lets end this here. There are a lot more problems that I havent mentioned but listing all of them would be impossible so I have touched on only the most important mistakes. When you combine all these setups character introductions and writing mistakes that is how you achieve a disappointment. So to sum it up here is Egos moral of the day: You cant rewrite the past but you can rewrite your FCKING SCRIPT. Now lets get out of here. You guys probably have some chores ahead of you and I have to get home before my wife almost burns the house down Again. A couple days ago she fell asleep while the potatoes were boiling and after that I didnt even try to clean the pot. I just bought a new one. Also I have printed out some more material for you so everybody take one copy from the desk while leaving. For next week you are gonna have to watch an anime called The Fruit of Evolution: Before I Knew It My Life Had It Made. Im just gonna warn you its pretty painful to watch. But as people say: Learn from your mistakes. So lets learn from this Very big mistake. Thats it have a nice week Quick note: Even though I typed that its gonna be next week it probably wont since writing this stuff took me about 23 weeks so For lesson 02 you are gonna have to wait a while probably. Thats it have a nice day or night.